17 A elevator pitch 2

1. Link: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mhmLQB-kkVc

2.  The feedback that I got was very positive and very helpful. The feedback said that I did a good job of introducing the problem and providing a proper solution. I also appreciated the feedback of how I listed for ways the problem occurred.

3. I tried to make the consumers with the problem more specific and to include more people with this problem.  This way I would appeal to a larger consumer base. I also included more ways that this problem could occur to people.